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Category: Poetry 3 comments 19 Aug 2004 @ 18:41 by ov : DecisionsI keep playing with my little lego bricks of words, building, renovating, and I'm wondering which of these two you like better. 20 Aug 2004 @ 01:59 by spiritseek : first one Its just a little easier to follow but still doesn't make a whole lot of sense to me anyways. Sounds like the war in Iraq and the sugar daddy Bush. 22 Aug 2004 @ 23:04 by ov : All Right That first one was changed just before I posted it, originally I had the fourth and seventh lines swapped. That pretty much nails it spiritseek, thank you for the input. Hopefully after I've accumulated a few hundred of these there will be a story emerge that makes more sense. As it stands now, without punctuation or capitals, and with deliberately built in ambiguity, these are designed to be adaptable to context. Other entries in Poetry 22 Dec 2004 @ 20:39: An Alter Ant 14 Sep 2004 @ 18:56: Compassion For The Camel 2 Sep 2004 @ 17:12: Dick 'N Kenny 30 Aug 2004 @ 19:21: It's Politics By God 24 Aug 2004 @ 21:47: Spirit & Science 22 Aug 2004 @ 22:57: Important Choices 19 Aug 2004 @ 17:18: Who Knows Who 5 Aug 2004 @ 00:04: concupiscence 1 Aug 2004 @ 00:16: Byron's Sennacherib 31 Jul 2004 @ 09:19: stultified
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