Silviamar: Flowing (Fluyendo) |
Category: Inspiration 7 comments 9 Mar 2006 @ 15:56 by judih : silviathe work is very lyrical to play with the english would be to re-write, to change the flow...ah and such a flow. (just take out one of the 'r's in stir) beautiful piece 9 Mar 2006 @ 16:10 by jstarrs : It's lovely like that... ..I wondered about putting a coma after lonely. 9 Mar 2006 @ 16:15 by judih : hi jeff yes! good. a comma after lonely offers a wonderful pause, and a dive into the next expression good call - you've made me hear it more clearly 9 Mar 2006 @ 17:50 by jstarrs : Oh! I heard it humbly & without thinking: wanting to pause, take breath between that fleeting flow which, anyway, might just be a series of static moments pearled together? I'm happy it rang a bell for you....;0) 9 Mar 2006 @ 19:05 by silviamar : Judih and Jeff, my fellow poets, thank you for your insights :-). I've corrected the word 'stir' and also have added the coma after lonely. I agree that it gives a great pause, an opportunity to take a short breath to continue flowing with the life! 12 Mar 2006 @ 00:25 by vibrani : Silvia I like this poem, too. Life is a poem :-) ********* Thank you Vibrani. I completely agree that life is a poem :-) 5 Apr 2006 @ 13:58 by Elena @156.35.192.4 : ¡precioso! He leído todos los poemas en español que has puesto aquí y me encantan!. Mientras leía éste me sentía muy relajada, fluyendo con la vida y con mi yo interior. No sé a qué te dedicas pero desde luego la poesía es lo tuyo, Silvia. ******* Hola Elena. Gracias por tu comentario. Vivo de la quimica, soy investigadora en la universidad de Oviedo, pero me gusta escribir poesia desde que era muy pequeña. Me alegro mucho que te gusten mis poemas! Other entries in Inspiration 22 Aug 2006 @ 18:20: The wind of love 29 May 2006 @ 09:37: I see you 18 Jan 2006 @ 13:18: Illusion's path (Sendero de ilusiones) 4 Jan 2006 @ 17:09: Seeding a smile 15 Dec 2005 @ 10:29: A candle in the night 24 Oct 2005 @ 20:45: She knows 3 Sep 2005 @ 12:36: Her birthday (su cumpleaños) 21 Aug 2005 @ 10:30: About life 26 Jul 2005 @ 21:39: Tell me, baby... (Dime, niña...) 9 Jul 2005 @ 12:41: Tomorrow (Mañana)
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