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11 Aug 2007 @ 20:36, by Marissa A Spencer

a friend on The Daily Grail remarked on my last poem...

"aren't poems supposed to rhyme?"

so... I wrote one that did lol

Beneath the Towering Spires



I have walked beneath the towering spires
That in crystal blue flashings rise
Reflections of light like freezing fires
Burning into my awestruck eyes

Others walk; beside, before, beside
Faces hidden, voices soft, robes a-glide
Penitents or worshipers, I cannot decide

I'm unseen by those gemlike walls above
So small and lightless now, I intend to be
Yet they radiate such grace and love
Sending fleeting visions for me to see

With wand'ring beings before me bright
I am but a small shard of blazing light
Return may I to this brilliant dimension
Passing the gates into new comprehension


© August 11,2007 Marissa A Spencer

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12 Aug 2007 @ 02:17 by vaxen : Nice!
Very well said, Marissa. However if you've ever read Robert Graves' works then you must know that there is no need whatsoever for poetry to rhyme itself to death.

Unfortunately most American, I suppose other nationalities as well, school children are not familiarized with Graves' work.

He says of poetry that it is 'religious invocation of the Muse' and that a woman should write as the Muse behind all poesy.

Agree or disagree he has a point. The Sofayeen, as well, mention this...

Symbolizes nature...veiled or unveiled. I personally care not either way nor will I be subservient to male or female dichotes of any persuasion.

Let's look into the root meaning of the word and take from all those fractals a semblance of essence beyond the plus or minus of it all. No Gods No Goddesses just pure being.

I like the way your word arrangements fall and fit themselves into a beingness which trance-mits your feeling...good show, Marissa.  

12 Aug 2007 @ 04:03 by skookum : Thanks *grins
I have a feeling the last poetry this guy had read was Dr Seuss

xox

m  

12 Aug 2007 @ 04:54 by jazzolog : Dr. Seuss
you silly goose
was too obtuse
a screw was loose
too much mousse
turned his hair puce
his poems in a noose
he screamed O Deuce
now he's with Zeus  

12 Aug 2007 @ 04:57 by skookum : yeah
lol

that's the idea jazz!  

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